HERE IT IS, THE FIRST PUBLIC VIEWING OF BRYCE'S F
IRST EVER POEM!
FIVE FIREMEN IN THE FIRETRUCK
RACING TO THE FIRE
IN FIVE SECONDS FLAT!
PUTTING OUT THE FIRE WITH FIVE FIRE HOSES
BUT THEY DIDN'T WATER THE ROSES!
WORDS FROM THE AUTHOR:
I got the idea to write a poem from Elizabeth at INKLESS TALES and we had been learning about 5 and I like fire engines.
My poem needs a title. Do you have an idea?
LEAVE A COMMENT WITH YOUR SUGGESTION.
17 comments:
Bryce, you should call it 'The Five Fire Fighters.Your poem is wonderful!
i like your good poem bryce!
Bryce, you could call it "Five Fireman Friends Fighting Fires in Five Seconds Flat"
Ben, you are on FIRE! You did it,Buddy!
You must have walked straight through the door and hopped onto the blog! I love the title - I wonder what Bryce will think? One thing's for sure... you'll have no trouble when we come to do 'f'!
Wow! See? You CAN do anything. I am knocked out speechless. Seriously, I sat in front of this comment box for the longest time. I read, and re-read the poem.
I think it's wonderful. What talents you possess. What doors we unlock inside ourselves by simply TRYING. Don't you feel marvelous, Bryce?
A word about titles: poet Emily Dickinson (whose last name I can never quite spell with certainty) gave NONE of her poems titles.
Some poets and also musicians, simply number their works, calling them "Opus #1," "Opus #2," etc.
Opus is Latin for "great work."
In the case of your poem, here are some suggestions, all of them truly terrible, and nowhere near worthy of the wonderful poem:
Rows of Firefighters (get it -- rows, and rose... okay, only funny to me.)
What Firefighters Water & Where
Firefighters Five Keep Friends But No Flowers Alive
Are you starting to see why I need assistance with titles?
Inspired and Amazed,
Elizabeth
I like your poem Bryce. Well done! I thought of a name for it -
"FIVE FAST FIRE FIGHTERS!"
From Laura.
Laura, a FABULOUS suggestion! You're another one that will be able to'show the way' when we learn about 'f'. Look how early you were on the blog today - you even beat me!
MY GRANDMA IS FUNNNY
WHEN WE PLAY I FEEL SUNNY
I like your poem, I like it because it's cool. Great work!
Bryce I like your poem. I think you should call it 'Fire Fighting Men Racing To The Fire'.
Ben, I like your title for the poem. I might put it as my title. Thank you for all your suggestions and comments about my poem. Keep thinking of more titles.
I like your poem and I really liked the end bit.
Bryce, I love your poem. I love it because I want to be a fire fighter when I get older.
Bryce you should call it the 'Five Fire Fighters Putting Out The Fire'. It is a very good poem.
Hi Bryce
I just thought I'd let you know that when Ben and I read your message saying you really liked his title for your poem, he was soooo happy. You are a very talented young poet. I am sure we are about to see a lot more talented 1m Gems in the near future. Good on your all for showing us how clever you are. It is a lot of fun reading poems in the afternoon.
I think Bryce you should call it 'My Fireman'. I really liked your poem and I am going to make one up for you.
Patrick said " i think Bryce should call his poem My Favourite Fireman.
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